Episode 3: Point of View
Yes, it is finally up. I know it took forever and I wish I could say it was definitely worth it. I have a feeling some people are going to hate where the Ryder thing goes in this episode. The Jill/Scout story line is weak. Will is just sad. And...well, Jake and Ham are of course enjoyable. Anyway...come back and share your thoughts.
Later
Estee
"It is not in the stars to hold our destiny, but in ourselves."
~~Shakespeare
silvia New Beginnings Addict
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(4/27/01 7:31 am) Reply
Re: Episode 3: Point of View
Should I be glad to be the first one to comment on this.. ? I am actually... I am serious in what I am about to write .. really.. serious..!!!
The truth is the episode is truly immaculately done. THe transition from each of the character's point of view was transferred in writing and in descriptive wise was flawless. I am in awe. Truly in awe.
I have begun to appreciate every single word that you guyz put down there. I even read the commercial which I think u should get paid for by the way...!! Try to talk to Nelle about that... LOL
I luv the interruptions with Ryder and Jake's point of view which I am intrigued to read and you have delivered it to us the readers. I don't even know where to start with the episode comments.. I don't think I even have actually..
THe plot with everyone's point of view is genius. Rather than focusing on Will only, everyone was given a say in what exactly what they were thinking. Its pure genius. Zoning on what other people's thought .. I like that...
Its very hard to go over from one person's thought to another cause u lose focus. Interruptions are hard to do cause it will be confusing and you might lose the reader. Its the same as movies as well as writing.. If its badly done, u know it is.. But when its well done... U acknowledge it...
This is going to be bloody long but I don't care.. I need to say it..!!!
Jake and Hamilton - I liked how u both dealt with Ryder but a little disappointed as well. Give me more..I must say I have more interest in Ryder now than Hamilton.
Luv the comparisons between the thoughts that went on too. With Jill and scout's mainly.
Jill and Scout - parenting issues. May I say, you have captured and also convinced me with the potrayals of both the characters.
Will and Bella - Sean...+ Will is so sappy here..That is all I am going to say.
Finn and Johanna - Get a room..!!
Now I am satisfied enough to shut up..Hmm did I leave anything out..? I'll be back if I do think of more... Hehehehe.. U are not getting rid of me this soon..!!!
One last thing.....This is yet the best and the creme de la creme of all episodes for me. IT was certainly worth the wait and definitely worth the time to wait for the upcoming episode.
Re: Episode 3: Point of View
since I have to hurry up and get ready for class, I gotta thank you for the praise and comment on one thing you said.
Will being sappy. This is at the end right? See, it's so funny because Harmony was all ready for them to break up and she read the way I'd written that scene and she was just like "they can't break up!" So...I dunno. I think I made him like that because he'd had a crummy weekend and he was just so glad to see her, you know? He had kind of a Dawson-y thing going on which is a little whiney, but...I don't know, I liked sappy Will. Plus, that little scene will do nice things to set stuff up for the next episode.
Now...gotta get ready...and you and everyone else, keep the feedback coming
Later
Estee
"It is not in the stars to hold our destiny, but in ourselves."
~~Shakespeare
silvia New Beginnings Addict
Posts: 54
(4/27/01 9:59 am) Reply
ITs me again
yeahh,.. I thought that Will and Bella were on the brink of breaking up as I read through... but they didn't .. I guess u have something up your sleeve..
About Will being sappy.. Well he is generally sappy but particularly here.. Its kinda sad and somewhat annoying cause he kinda feel like Dawson.. Not that I have anything against Dawson... "Just get over it will you...? " Something I would say to them.
It did sort of bring the whole atmosphere and the story up and down a bit.. Which is good as well I think..
Will = just plain SAD
can u give him a few happy thoughts next epi..? LIke Scout in the Replacement action..
non registered
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(4/27/01 11:58 am) Reply
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i agree will is pathetic these days. and his and bella's relationship is boring and old.
the jill/scout duo is also a little annoyingly perfect, they seem way to mature and 30. also i wouldnt mind seeing scout miss bella a little more. jill especiallly seems way too grown up for everyone else.
as for jake and hammie, i think ive read befoer that you guys dont want them having sex yet, but i think it should at least come up more, whether or not they actually do it, it is definatly an issue in the lives of 16 yr olds. but as long as i get to read about them doing anything i will be happy.
ryder is just bizarre and adds interesting tension to things.
as for the mixing up of the point of views, interesting, id like to see more different VOs otehr than will in future episodes.
arlight thats all for now, thanks for the GREAT episodes.
charmaine New Beginnings Beginner
Posts: 4
(4/28/01 1:02 am) Reply
Ryder is the bestest character!!!
I loved episode 3 !!! i loved all the episodes. you guys rock. i especially like the whole jill/scout thing going on and how scout and bella have moved on. i luv the Ryder story lines too, and the confusion of whether he likes Jake or not.
congrats on a GREAT long awaited episode
New Beginnings Beginner
Posts: 22
(4/28/01 9:57 am) Reply
Re: Ryder is the bestest character!!!
Hey u guys,
Fun episode..
I like the whole Voice over of every character, but it was kinda hard to follow.Like i was reading the conversation between two people and then the Voice over thing and at times I was like WHATTTTTTTTT??
Will/Bella are very boring.Sorry to say but i don't enjoy reading about them.
Jill/Scout are getting way ahead of themselves..I mean come onnn they are ONLY 16 years old..
Jake/Hamilton need more ACTION I loved the whole Hamilton putting on mascara and eyeliner..Very cute. The making out scene at the Club was sooooo good
Ryder gets on my nerves.He's so rude.First he says he likes Jake then He says he doesn't...
Johanna/Finn Should get a ROOM (Silvia is so right)
Sean/Bella are cute together.
Overall it was good, but more Jake/Hamilton plz...He He
Continue the great work
Laterz
Puff off cancer boy:)
Leia Registered User
Posts: 1
(4/28/01 1:44 pm) Reply
Re: Episode 3: Point of View
yeah, this was totally worth the wait!
i didn't think it was hard at all to follow the VO:s - brilliant job there!
but the most impressive thing, though, was that you actually made me like sean. it was almost scary, 'cause i've always loathed him...
...and ryder...well, what can i say...i like him more and more every ep.
the only thing i didn't love was the will-bella thing...but everyone has already said that so i'm gonna shut up now.
ok one more thing - estee, i think you kinda forgot to remove your notes from the bottom of the script
Re: Episode 3: Point of View
Come on...Lets give Will a break. He really, really, really needed that hug. It was sweet. OK, thought I'd deffend my boy since no one else seems to care. Hope everyone enjoyed the ep. Later Gators.
Hey Estee and Harmony--episode 3 was as wonderfully written and devised as the rest of your great episodes. I think it is remarkable that you guys can invent such exciting and new twists in the plot of the story. Trust me, the readers are NOT disapointed.
New Beginnings Beginner
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(4/30/01 12:31 pm) Reply
Re: episode 3
I liked it!!! It wasn't as good as the others, but every writer makes a story that's more bad than the rest... (can you tell i'm not a writer my self...?)
Where would we be without a little love...?
YAfancrisee
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(5/4/01 9:16 am) Reply
iloveyourfanfics
You are such a great writer estee!!!
was will a writer?
eniwei...thanx so much for such great stories. i'm addicted to them and to your site. i check it weekly to see if there is any new fanfic.
where did you learn to write like that? where do you get all your ideas?
Re: iloveyourfanfics
Well, thank you very much. Harmony and I get our ideas from you guys...I mean, we make up the stories, but we pay attention to what everyone says and...try to keep them happy. Can't keep everyone happy, of course, but...you know, we tried. And, as far as how we learned to write like this...um...yeah...I am a great imitator. Not much on original stories, but apparently not terrible at taking what the WB scrapped and making something of it. Anyway...gotta go study.
Later
Estee
"It is not in the stars to hold our destiny, but in ourselves."
~~Shakespeare
Christine
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(5/21/01 5:43 pm) Reply
Episode 3:Point of View
This episode was totally fantastic! I absolutely love the whole point of view thing! It's made the story so much more interesting! Please post the next episode soon! You guys are the greatest!
it was almost scary, 'cause i've always loathed him...
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